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Location: Gloucester England
Hi guys well i got my first gig coming up at a charity event and i was wondering what you guys think of the flyer so far i have manged to get my friend to make me it and i think its good just needs a little touching up.
https://viewmorepics.myspace.com/index.cf...imageID=6177325
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Classically British
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Location: Epsom, Surrey, England
Quick comments:
~ "Betrayal" is spelt wrong
~ England should have a capital E
~ The "are" after "Betrayal" shouldn't have a capital
~ No comma before "and devilstickers"
~ "easily amongst the best of their art in england" doesn't read well to me. "in their arts" might be better
~ "would entertain you" I'd change to "will entertain you"
I'm not sure about the blurb in general to be honest, but can't quite tell you why
Helpful eh? 
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Momma Bear
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Location: Telford, Shrops, United Kingdom
to add to Durbs' comments I'd also say that the font is a bit hard to read, maybe have it all white? I know it wouldnt look as fiery! But it would be easier to read.
And if it was my flyer I think I'd have:
Betrayal are a talented group of performers who dazzle crowds with their amazing fire spinning, juggling, acro-balance, diabolo, and devilsticking!
They are one of the best circus arts groups in Britain and will entertain from start to finish!
Other than that I love the flyer and wish you all the best!
Hoppers are angels who lift us to our feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly.
Hitman
985 posts
Location: Gloucester England
Cheers for the comments guys i just put all these comments to the designer.
Durbs: THank you would like to be my spell checker.
Jo: THanks hopefuly Everything will sort its self out i might just use your suggestion and get them to change the text. I have got them to lighten the entire thing up slightly as well just to make it more re-able
cheers guys
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just had a quick look and i like the artwork, jo is right about the fonts and font colours, and durbs is right about the grammatical errors.
otherwise it looks pretty safe
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hmmm... i can't even see it at all, bloody myspace...
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Hitman
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Location: Gloucester England
uploaded to my myspace specaily for you lot
https://viewmorepics.myspace.com/index.cf...imageID=6177325
That link should now work... you lucky people having my myspace.
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Momma Bear
4,525 posts
Location: Telford, Shrops, United Kingdom
yeah that's loads better!!
Hoppers are angels who lift us to our feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly.
Hitman
985 posts
Location: Gloucester England
Still not quite finsihed thanks for the help guys and girls
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Betrayal dazzles crowds with amazing fire spinning, juggling, acro-balance, diabolo, and devilsticking!
One of the best circus arts groups in Britain will entertain you start to finish!
I think I would put the blurb more like this...it is quicker to read, and tries less to persuade...it is firmer and confident
Faith
Nay, whatever comes one hour was sunlit and the most high gods may not make boast of any better thing than to have watched that hour as it passed
Hitman
985 posts
Location: Gloucester England
its grafftai for betrayal
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