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MikefromGlos
MikefromGlos

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Location: Gloucester England
Member Since: 10th Jul 2006
Total posts: 985
Posted:Hi guys well i got my first gig coming up at a charity event and i was wondering what you guys think of the flyer so far i have manged to get my friend to make me it and i think its good just needs a little touching up.



http://viewmorepics.myspace.com/index.cf...imageID=6177325



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Durbs
Durbs

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Location: Epsom, Surrey, England
Member Since: 23rd Sep 2001
Total posts: 5688
Posted:Quick comments:
~ "Betrayal" is spelt wrong
~ England should have a capital E
~ The "are" after "Betrayal" shouldn't have a capital
~ No comma before "and devilstickers"
~ "easily amongst the best of their art in england" doesn't read well to me. "in their arts" might be better
~ "would entertain you" I'd change to "will entertain you"

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I'm not sure about the blurb in general to be honest, but can't quite tell you why umm Helpful eh? ubblol


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jo_rhymes
jo_rhymes

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Location: Telford, Shrops
Member Since: 10th Apr 2005
Total posts: 4525
Posted:to add to Durbs' comments I'd also say that the font is a bit hard to read, maybe have it all white? I know it wouldnt look as fiery! But it would be easier to read.

And if it was my flyer I think I'd have:

Betrayal are a talented group of performers who dazzle crowds with their amazing fire spinning, juggling, acro-balance, diabolo, and devilsticking!
They are one of the best circus arts groups in Britain and will entertain from start to finish!

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Other than that I love the flyer and wish you all the best! biggrin


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MikefromGlos
MikefromGlos

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Location: Gloucester England
Member Since: 10th Jul 2006
Total posts: 985
Posted:Cheers for the comments guys i just put all these comments to the designer.

Durbs: THank you would like to be my spell checker.
Jo: THanks hopefuly Everything will sort its self out i might just use your suggestion and get them to change the text. I have got them to lighten the entire thing up slightly as well just to make it more re-able

cheers guys


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alien_oddity
alien_oddity

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Location: in the trees
Member Since: 31st Dec 2004
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Posted:just had a quick look and i like the artwork, jo is right about the fonts and font colours, and durbs is right about the grammatical errors.


otherwise it looks pretty safe
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NOn
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Location: ffidrac
Member Since: 23rd Jun 2004
Total posts: 1643
Posted:hmmm... i can't even see it at all, bloody myspace...

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if it makes no sense that's because it's NOn-sense.

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MikefromGlos
MikefromGlos

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Location: Gloucester England
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Posted:uploaded to my myspace specaily for you lot

http://viewmorepics.myspace.com/index.cf...imageID=6177325

That link should now work... you lucky people having my myspace.


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jo_rhymes
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Posted:yeah that's loads better!! bounce

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MikefromGlos
MikefromGlos

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Location: Gloucester England
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Posted:Still not quite finsihed thanks for the help guys and girls

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faith enfire
faith enfire

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Member Since: 27th Jan 2006
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Posted:Betrayal dazzles crowds with amazing fire spinning, juggling, acro-balance, diabolo, and devilsticking!
One of the best circus arts groups in Britain will entertain you start to finish!

I think I would put the blurb more like this...it is quicker to read, and tries less to persuade...it is firmer and confident


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Spanner
Spanner

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Location: in the works... somewhere...
Member Since: 27th Feb 2003
Total posts: 2790
Posted:Ful stop after "Cpt. Bill", then "Visit (MySpace address)"
or just "Visit (MySpace address) on a seperate line.

"podsmead" should have a capital "P"
"At" should have a lower case "a"
"beaufort" should have a capital "B"

I assume "On the" is being left blank on purpose" smile

I think you should leave the fire/glow colour in, otherwise it will be difficult for the non-spinning eye to know what you are advertising at a glance.

What's the imagery between the figure and the poster design information?
There's also a bit underneath that.
Is it writing?
If it is, I can't read it and if it's not, it doesn't look relevant confused


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MikefromGlos
MikefromGlos

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Location: Gloucester England
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Total posts: 985
Posted:its grafftai for betrayal

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