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arsnHow do you change this thing???
1,903 posts
Location: Behind the couch...


Posted:
This was when I was in a part of my life which Alot of others have been, tell me what you think, if you don't mind...I'm going to paint a picture,A picture with a twist.I'll paint it with a razor blade,I'll paint it on my wrist.And if I paint that picture right,A fountain will appear.And with that streaming fountain,All my problems will disappear...I just wished to share a piece of me to you all... Hope you liked it...

I can't hear you... I have a banana in my ear.

"You mean I'll have to use my brain?... but I use staff!!!" ~ ben-ja-men


Organized Kaosmember
238 posts
Location: Thornhill, Ontario Canada


Posted:
Bendy!!! Thats hilarious,
After I read that I went straight to my keyboard and played Tom Pettys free falling, while belting out the new lyrics...
Ye so me and spiral have a little plan to revive this thread,,,we are secretly concocting a plan in both our grandmothers basement to take over the....I mean revive this thread

Im at skool now so I dont have any poems with me, but Ill post one soon
And Spiral, Ill send the next thing to you soon, I just been a little busy...

[ 10 April 2002, 00:35: Message edited by: Organized Kaos ]

Every morning I wake up and hit the ground yawning...


arsnHow do you change this thing???
1,903 posts
Location: Behind the couch...


Posted:
I'm a watch'in you!!!

I can't hear you... I have a banana in my ear.

"You mean I'll have to use my brain?... but I use staff!!!" ~ ben-ja-men


arsnHow do you change this thing???
1,903 posts
Location: Behind the couch...


Posted:
It's been awhile... here's another one of another time I want to get over, by the way shes gone...

But you never...

I wait by the phone everyday,
but you never call.
I get ready to go somewhere,
but you never show up.
I tell you important things,
but you never listen.
I say I love you,
but you never answer.
I write you mail,
but you never respond.
I ask if you love me, I ask if you care,
but you never pay attention

You make me fell all alone.
You make me fell unloved.
You make me fell like nobody cares and nobody ever will.
How can you do that to somebody you are supposed to love?
How can somebody so sweet be so cruel?
How can I hate so many things you do but still love you so much?
Those are questions that will go unanswered forever,
because I can ask and ask but you will never respond...

I think I'll go cry now... sorry...

I can't hear you... I have a banana in my ear.

"You mean I'll have to use my brain?... but I use staff!!!" ~ ben-ja-men


Organized Kaosmember
238 posts
Location: Thornhill, Ontario Canada


Posted:
Alrite so here's a few more
this one kinda relates to Arsns poem

I'm seeing colours
I'm seeing colours fly past
Nothing's real when nothing lasts
A downward spiral
An upard draft
I get sucked in
And you just laughed

I took a walk to ease my pain
I walked and walked in the bone-drenching rain
It's like an endless cycle of highs and lows
spinning around again and again

I tried to be myself, to open up to you
But you just looked at me funny, pretending your lies were true
so I cried and I cried, and as my tears fell
I slowly but surely regrew my shell.

This next on is one of those more depressing ones I promised:

Spring Rain

I'm walking on muddy ground
And I feel like the mud beneath my shoes
Walked all over by everybody
wearing it away, leaving an imprint in the dirt

And the imprint stays
Like a fresh bleeding wound
Until the next foot steps down
distorting the print and wearing the mud away

That mud is me
Stepped on, used, abbused, falsely accused
By the passerby's who pass me by
Leaving an imprint forever etched in my muddy flesh

And slowly they wear me out
Until the spring rain comes to wash my mud away
But that spring rain won't come
No, she stays hidden from me

But I move on and live
knowing one day she'll come to me
To quench my thirst and wash my dirt
Like a cool spring rain...

*Goes off to cry with Arsn*

Every morning I wake up and hit the ground yawning...


arsnHow do you change this thing???
1,903 posts
Location: Behind the couch...


Posted:
Both sitting in conner huging and sobbing uncontrolably...

I can't hear you... I have a banana in my ear.

"You mean I'll have to use my brain?... but I use staff!!!" ~ ben-ja-men


KyrianDreamer
4,308 posts
Location: York, England


Posted:
*runs over and hugs them both*

you guys are wonderful. the world might be a bitch, and belive me, i know, but you two are awesome and deserve a lot of happiness!

*stays for a bit, finding that the company is comforting*

Keep your dream alive
Dreamin is still how the strong survive

Shalom VeAhavah

New Hampshire has a point....


Organized Kaosmember
238 posts
Location: Thornhill, Ontario Canada


Posted:
*Stays in the warm embrace of his friends, suddenly stands and yells "To the laboratory!!!!" Kaos then runs to converse with Spiral, his secret collaberator..."

Every morning I wake up and hit the ground yawning...


KyrianDreamer
4,308 posts
Location: York, England


Posted:
well i can't find anything good to post... but i did find another one that doesn't make me grab my lighter and burn it..

Darkness
I drove you home
We talked about nothing
And smiled and laughed

Silence
I didn’t mean to say anything
You looked out the window
And now I’m scared

Tension
I know we’re both scared
Right now we can’t hide
We can’t pretend to each other

Fakery
The perfect way to get through a day
Even if you don’t mean to
I don’t go out of my way to do it

Shyness
Makes us loud, so we can fight the fear
Of being alone
Of being unwanted

Hope
Is all we can have right now
Someday it’ll be all right
If we try hard enough

Trust
Doesn’t come easily
And I don’t want the responsibility
Well, I do, but I’m afraid

Fear
Rules our lives
And I want to go beyond that
I will try not to hurt you

Love

it's actully pretty recent. i guess this means i just havn't had time to hate it yet.

Keep your dream alive
Dreamin is still how the strong survive

Shalom VeAhavah

New Hampshire has a point....


arsnHow do you change this thing???
1,903 posts
Location: Behind the couch...


Posted:
Couldn't find anything 'good'... then what would you call that??? I loved it...

I can't hear you... I have a banana in my ear.

"You mean I'll have to use my brain?... but I use staff!!!" ~ ben-ja-men


KyrianDreamer
4,308 posts
Location: York, England


Posted:
well, i guess someone should *blushes*

i think ur weird tho

Keep your dream alive
Dreamin is still how the strong survive

Shalom VeAhavah

New Hampshire has a point....


DocLiquidmember
97 posts
Location: Naples, Florida


Posted:
After reading much of the previous poetry entries that have been made on this forum, I decided to start another and deliver to you my own, though it has little to do with our art form, tell me what you think and feel free to write your own, I am eager to read.

TRIAL OF LOVE, NO EVIL INTENT

To say that I am but a wanderer
Is to deny that I believe
And yet to say that I am otherwise
Would then intend me to deceive
And here there is no need for false acclaim
Where only lovers do embrace
Below the moonlit sky I find the truth
With just one glance upon her face
For deep within those eyes her love shines bright
In mine a solitary tear
For I do know with all my heart and soul
No other could I love so dear
But is this real and not some fantasy
Of she, this beauty to posess
And I to keep as though it were my own
A dream on which I do obsess
Can this in truth be more than just a dream
A longing loving fantasy
Shall we be lost in love forever more
And was this joining meant to be
Surely it is I pray without reply
For in those eyes I see it all
A love that grows with every passing day
To conquer those both great and small
Although it seems our oves been tried once more
There is no other way to see
For no evil intent was spared and now
Together we shall always be

DOC

Let us Light up the Night


DocLiquidmember
97 posts
Location: Naples, Florida


Posted:
Hey Kaos, do you often get tangled in your sheets?
I've read that in your work a couple of times now, I like that! It's very real when writers use things over again, it has meaning. Keep posting.

I love this thread and I will start posting a lot of mine as well so that we can keep this post alive!

PLUR
DOC

Let us Light up the Night


DocLiquidmember
97 posts
Location: Naples, Florida


Posted:
*bump*

Don't let this thread die

Let us Light up the Night


Organized Kaosmember
238 posts
Location: Thornhill, Ontario Canada


Posted:
Thanx doc...I dont know if I do get tangled in my sheets that much
I guess its a cliche I like to use a lot
No worries, I havent posted in awhile,
So when I get home from skool I'll have a whole lot more for all of you...I think I'll go write one right now...

Every morning I wake up and hit the ground yawning...


arsnHow do you change this thing???
1,903 posts
Location: Behind the couch...


Posted:
Come on Spiral and Kaos... keep up...

SIN

How soft and smooth your wounderous skin.
How wide and wounderful your marvelous grin.
Just thinking of you must be a sin.

Now that this sin has begun,
I think of you as my own special sun.
Your radiant glow warming me from inside out,
You make me so happy I want to scream and shout.

When you set I start to cry,
I felt so bad I wanted to die.
But when up rose the beautiful moon,
I knew you would return to me soon.
For the moon can never stay too long,
Soon the sun must sing its song.

When you get up you make the world light,
With your beautiful rays shining bright.
I knew you were not here to stay,
But still I was going to have a wonderous day...

Things are finally looking up for me... 'bout time

I can't hear you... I have a banana in my ear.

"You mean I'll have to use my brain?... but I use staff!!!" ~ ben-ja-men


arsnHow do you change this thing???
1,903 posts
Location: Behind the couch...


Posted:
I'm hog'in this one now...

Walking Alone

Neither sin nor holy deed,
Can unchain me from my need,
To hear your voice,
To feel your touch,
I never would have thought,
I'd miss you this much.

From the moment we parted,
I began wandering the uncharted,
To have truly loved,
And truly lost,
I stole a piece of heaven,
And must now pay the cost.

The world seems so void,
And I am terribly annoyed,
That no matter what I say,
No matter what I do,
No matter what the time,
I still think of you.

The hardest thing is not to call,
To sit and do nothing at all,
To agonize in solitude,
Over my terrible fate,
To walk into the future,
Without my perfect mate.

Wipes a tear and gets ready for the next one...

I can't hear you... I have a banana in my ear.

"You mean I'll have to use my brain?... but I use staff!!!" ~ ben-ja-men


arsnHow do you change this thing???
1,903 posts
Location: Behind the couch...


Posted:
And here's another...

Which is it?

You tell me you don't know,
Whether you love me as a friend,
Or with your soul.

You don't know what to do,
And cannot make up your mind,
So I continue to wait for you.

If you love me true,
Tell me so.
If you love me not,
I'll let you go.

I have loved you continually,
Since nearly a year ago.
I have waited for you lovingly,
But now I need to know.

Do you love me for my strengh,
Do you love me for my heart.
Do you keep me for yourself,
Because you can't stand to be apart?

Can you watch me love another,
Can you be happy for me?
If I were to marry someone else,
Would you be there to see?

Is it only friendship,
Is that all I provide?
Someone to lean on,
Someone in which to confide?

Or am I a constant thiught,
Always on your mind.
The one that's better than the rest,
The one you wanted to find.

Is this something,
That has a long-term chance?
Or is this just an exercise,
In childish romance?

Could you see me as your husband,
Could you see yourself as my wife?
Am I someone in which you,
Could spend the rest of your life?

If the answer is no,
Then we know what to do.
If the answer is yes,
I will wait for you.

I do not know,
Where this might end.
But I know I love.
The time that we spend.

I will always be your friend,
That is not in debate.
What I need to know is,
Could I be your mate?

I'll be waiting to hear from you all... mainly you two... Spiral and Koas...

I can't hear you... I have a banana in my ear.

"You mean I'll have to use my brain?... but I use staff!!!" ~ ben-ja-men


SpiralOolering Man
729 posts
Location: Farnborough, Hampshire


Posted:
Kaos, u need to send the last email again, I've lost it somewhere! just got a letter today. One of my poems will be in print this summer . quite chuffed with that.

Organized Kaosmember
238 posts
Location: Thornhill, Ontario Canada


Posted:
ye man, Ill send it again, I forgot what I rote but Ill try and remember
yo did you get it published off of poetry.com?
cuz they sent me a letter saying that they published mine

Every morning I wake up and hit the ground yawning...


Organized Kaosmember
238 posts
Location: Thornhill, Ontario Canada


Posted:
oh ye, one more thing
I keep meaning to post more poems, but always forget, Ill try and post one or two tonite

Every morning I wake up and hit the ground yawning...


KyrianDreamer
4,308 posts
Location: York, England


Posted:
you forgot again, ball and chain

i happened to want to post this, altho it is from a friend (i haev permission, no worries) just because i rather liked it... anyhoo

I don’t understand.
Life doesn’t make sense.
I don’t cry anymore.
I thought I’d tell you that.

It’s a nice morning.
The Sun reflecting on the dew.
I’d like to share this morning.
You don’t pay attention though.

Always complaining,
That I never talk to you.
I’m always explaining,
Do you ever hear me?

I stopped trying
And yet I never can
I’ll never win
And I’ll never give up

Yet I think I did
You can’t hurt me anymore
You can’t use anything to hurt me
‘Cause I don’t need anything but myself

You showed me the truth
I should never love
Because anything I love
Will be used against me

You were supposed to take care of me
And you did
You did a good job of it
But you also hurt me

And you wouldn’t stop
And you wouldn’t understand
And I don’t understand
And I’m still afraid

And I won’t love now
And I won’t care now
And I won’t live now
But I’m gonna survive

And you can’t stop me.

Keep your dream alive
Dreamin is still how the strong survive

Shalom VeAhavah

New Hampshire has a point....


SpiralOolering Man
729 posts
Location: Farnborough, Hampshire


Posted:
Ok here's a joint effort from me and kaos. what we going to call it then? I think I'll settle for:

Upsiwng, Downswing

The pendulum swings in a back and forth rotation,
broken clockwork body, mind and soul,
A face worn down with a look of despiration
What used to be my mind an empty hole,

A face aged from seeing and living a tired life
With eyes infused with wonder, pain and joy
A face wrinkled and torn from his victory and hard strife
remembered with great sorrow youthful joy.

a time where all was peaceful, and all was serene,
When love was in full circle, unconditional,
With memories so happy their obscene
and life was a series of highs and lows, smooth and transitional

And he looks around, at where he stands
Alone and on the edge of somewhere new
A new and unknown situation in his hands
Only one thing left for him to do

Nice one Kaos - respect for that and hey, is that an almost happy ending on one of our poems? its a bit more optimistic than usual

[ 25 April 2002, 16:24: Message edited by: Spiral ]

Organized Kaosmember
238 posts
Location: Thornhill, Ontario Canada


Posted:
yo man, I just noticed you posted that now,,props for that, andf props on the title too...
The ends good ku its like mysterious, you can take it in two ways of what he does with his new situation
Does he make the best of it, or does he end it all (dum dum dum)
Thats for al of you to decide, kind of like a halk empty half full kinda thing...

oh ye, and other ppl should post more...keep this thread alive

Every morning I wake up and hit the ground yawning...


CantusSILVER Member
Tantamount to fatuity
15,966 posts
Location: Down the road, United Kingdom


Posted:
Because Queen Of Wands showed an interest I thought i should bump this.

Meh


SurlochSILVER Member
member
64 posts
Location: Brisbane, Australia


Posted:
Well, now it's been bumped may as well post

Happiness IS

Happiness is, the sun on my face
A birds song, a quiet grace
Happiness is, a love that's true
A time alone, spent with you.

A field of flowers, coloured gold
A river running quick and cold
A moonlit night by candle flame
A smile shared by souls the same

Happiness is, a laugh out loud
A gentle kiss, a love avowed
Happiness is, all this and more
A truth inside, you can't ignore.

Seems to me the thread has been more morbid than not so that's one of my happy ones

Ní mar a síltear a bítear

“Things may not be as they seem to be”


KatBRONZE Member
Pooh-Bah
2,211 posts
Location: London, Wales (UK)


Posted:
Last night I had mental dreams all night long - So as an ode to my dreams I have written this:

Come inside my head
And see the visions
Of the lving, the dead,
The fantastic, the obscene
All the images that are part of me

Bodies Writhing
Babies Crying
Children laughing
Old men dancing
Coloured Lights
Amazing Sights

Falling from the sky
Shall i hit the ground and die
or soar up laughing with the birds
Who knows?
Depends which way tonights dream goes

Purple Trees
Honey Bees
Flying Elephants
Circus Tents
Inexplicable Fears
Golden Tears

I'm told that I'm a dreamer
But what is sleeping for
But to escape to the magical world
Come see it unfurl
Inside my head
The End

Come faeries, take me out of this dull world, for I would ride with you upon the wind and dance upon the mountains like a flame.

- W B Yeats


arsnHow do you change this thing???
1,903 posts
Location: Behind the couch...


Posted:
Thanks for digging this back up C@ntus, I was thinking about it only a week ago when I was writing some.

And here are some of them...

Far, far into the distant horizon
Let’s ride forgotten on the wings in the wind.

Sometime we will surly meet –
As the charming future
Beckons us on.

Let’s start the journey
To a new world!
Open the door to a memorable legend!

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
As travelling across the sea,
from the unknown country,
the wind passes gently behind my ears,
will you tell me if people live with the same
bewildering feelings inside?

To love someone,
or to be loved by someone –
I wonder what those feelings are like?
I can only feel vaguely from afar.
I want to cherish the feelings that has just started inside me,
the fate trembles my heart like the wind.

Once again... thanks C@ntus...

I can't hear you... I have a banana in my ear.

"You mean I'll have to use my brain?... but I use staff!!!" ~ ben-ja-men


CantusSILVER Member
Tantamount to fatuity
15,966 posts
Location: Down the road, United Kingdom


Posted:
Bumped for the short sighted.

Meh


TwirlyVicnorthern monkey
235 posts

Posted:
i write poetry as part of my degree and it is VERY rare that I allow any of it to be read because i feel my poetry is poor.

However, I do really need some feedback for my folder soooooo, here goes

MR MINERVA

To weave a lie
Is as simple as
To slip a stitch

Once dropped it
Can be resewn but
Never the same

Loose
Malformed
Irregular

He will stich this
Lie till the thread
Runs thin

To step aside
And watch the spiral
Does not please me

I can try to
Bleed the truth
A part believes

Internally
I must stretch this lie
Till my trust runs thin

ex-hop-aholic, now inconsistent lurker...


CantusSILVER Member
Tantamount to fatuity
15,966 posts
Location: Down the road, United Kingdom


Posted:
What is Minerva?

Meh


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